Darkness cloaked the chilly and barren streets of London. It indeed was a haunting and moonless night. Distant howls echoed off the walls and buildings, frightening any souls who dared to venture out. Judith Marce, from the distant Arabian peninsula, tread the black and dark streets alone on that cold and misty night. She had come to London to start a new life and find success in her endeavors. Tonight, she planned to celebrate her success in finding a new job - as an official Subway employee. Nothing could disappoint her, nothing could destroy her glory, nothing could take away her new life: not even the sinister and mystifying nights or even the haunting tales of death.
1 comment:
This is a wonderful hook! You have the gift of rhetoric in your writing style, particularly in the repetitious usage of "nothing" in your "Nothing could disappoint her, nothing could destroy her glory, nothing could take away her new life" line. It sets up an ominous tone, so that the reader is guided into thinking that something horrible is about to happen. Great job!
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